I remember the time when we were together, inseparable, without a care in the world. We would stay indoors, doing nothing but fool around like a bunch of high-schoolers.
Then it happened.
Someone came by and dragged you away.
And dragged my heart along.
A flash piece for Five Sentence Stories. The theme is Moments.
For some reason I feel this involves your personal life. It involves the day when either your sister, but more likely your brother got married and left to a start a life of their own.
ReplyDeleteHave I read to far into this, or has it been merely my imagination. A curious mind wants to know.
A Happy and Prosperous New Year to you and your family.
I'm sorry to disappoint you, but this is just a piece of fiction :)
DeleteThank you, the same to you.
There's no disappointment whatsoever. It's just that it sounded real, and isn't that want you want from your readers when they read the fiction you've written, don't you want your fiction to feel real to your readers,
DeleteYes. You do.
DeleteI'm glad you felt that way :)
If you have a moment I'd love to read what you think of my response this week,
ReplyDeleteNicely paced. I like it.
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteLoss. Unspoken desire. Evocative
ReplyDeleteIt always is.
DeleteYour title is perfect for this piece. There is always that lurking fear that someone more desirable will come along, and you really conveyed the hurt here. Excellent writing!
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Thank you.
DeleteThe best fiction is hard to separate fact from fiction. You certainly have that here.
ReplyDeleteThank you. :)
DeleteSo much emotion packed in there. x
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Thank you.
DeleteVery nice in that it was written in a way that many can relate to from their own experiences.
ReplyDeleteLove the last line, very well done. Happy new year!
ReplyDeleteThank you. A jovial new year.
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